"Now, if you open the packet, you'll see the list of characters. Don't bother examining it, as most characters listed are irrelevant. Let's start with the prologue.
'The cats gathered around a pool. They all looked into it eagerly. A dark shape appeared on the surface. A blue she cat looked up. Her eyes were bright.'"
Gleamstar looks up from the papers in her paws. "As you can see, there are short, choppy sentences. Can anyone tell me why this sentence structure is detrimental?@