Overall it’s not bad, there are some typos, the name mixup Gin mentioned.
The main issue from this little bit is a dramatic shift of pace. You give us a fair amount of detail on Fenris’s first day, but almost nothing on the rest of the week, including just skimming over the footage of his parents’ car wreck that seems like an important plot point.
I’d recommend separating that bit into a few different chapters, have the midnight channel mentioned a few times as Fenris goes through his school day before he finally decides to watch it himself. Cue describing the wreck footage, which I assume is likely to come up later.
