Some music as you read
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Makoto, alone with Akira in his room. It wasn't anything special, they've done it plenty of times before. Just the two lovebirds together on the mildly uncomfortable sofa accompanied only by the faint bustle and chatter of the cafe below.

“Hey, Akira-kun… would you mind if…”

Akira was listening attentively.

“Nevermind… Actually… uh…” Makoto was all flustered. She lightly slapped her cheeks as if to motivate herself to rise to a great challenge. “There’s something I need your help with.”

Akira stayed quiet and noticed the steady pinkening of Makoto’s cheeks.

“Well… there’s something I’ve never done before that I’d like to try. Something... uh…” Makoto was getting nervous again, her face getting brighter by the second, almost as if she had a fever. “K-k… k-ki-ki…” Makoto tried her best to force the word out, but it put up too good of a fight.

“Kiss?” Akira remarked in his normal, stoic voice.

Makoto’s face lit up, her cheeks now almost matched the color of her eyes. “H-how can you say that with such a straight face? Are you not the least bit flustered at all?”

Akira let out a chuckle, he always enjoyed seeing Makoto like this.

She sighed. “Yes, that thing. I need your help. You’ll be my first and I don’t want to mess this up, especially not with you.”

“Just go for it.” suggested Akira, “You’ll do fine, I promise.”

Makoto, albeit hesitantly, closed her eyes. She puckered her lips in a way that looked forced and unnatural. It wasn’t a great start, she obviously needed help.

“Let’s stop right there…” Akira said sympathetically.

Makoto, still glowing red, stopped. She felt extremely embarrassed, like she just wanted to hide from Akira after doing something so stupid. “I… need help…” she mumbled in despair.

Akira pondered for a moment. How do you teach a person to kiss? “Hmmmm… Okay, how about this. Just kind of relax and let your mouth hang open a bit, and I’ll take care of the rest.” he suggested.

Makoto, even more embarrassed than before, complied and did as Akira said. Obviously, Akira didn’t give the best advice. She looked kind of goofy sitting there with her eyes closed and mouth hung open like that, but it was enough.

Akira went in, and then, contact. Makoto’s eyes shot open in surprise, she knew it was coming, but it still threw her off guard. She closed her eyes again, and enjoyed the moment. The softness, the warmth, the sensation, all perfect, more than anything Makoto was expecting.

And just like that, it was over. Makoto had had her first kiss, and by the end of the night, it certainly wouldn’t be the last.

It's wonderful. * w *

Perfection. And perfect atmospheric music. Thank you @Mako-chan.

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I thought the music would be a good touch, I listen to the whole soundtrack while I do any sort of writing so I thought that would be a good reading song too.

Also, constructive criticism would be appreciated in case I end up making another one.

SHIT I DID IT AGAIN

THE TRUTH IS OUT.

Kono BAKA!!!!

God have mercy on my stupid stupid soul.

NANI??

In reality though- this is actually very good quality. As someone who is an avid reader and writer of fanfiction the quality of the writing is certainly up there.

You certainly nail the characters very well, and one of the biggest complaints I have- not enough breaks or not starting a new paragraph after a character speaking- is not an issue here. Everything is explained well enough, but not overly.

Though it's a bit awkward in a few places for me, but I will assume that is mostly due to the fact that I kind of do not like this pairing.

I dare say my only valid complaint is that it's not longer.

Lol, I've always kinda hated fanfic, but who knew there was a couple out there great enough to inspire me to write some

I'm a slut for fanfictions. I love reading the stories people can come up with, not to mention I am shipping trash and I really just wanna read about the characters I like together actually getting together so I can pretend- if only for a moment- that it is canon.

It's cute.

I'm certainly no fan fiction enthusiast so my opinion may not count for much, but I really liked it. I agree with Kitagawa's sentiment that you did a really good job at capturing the personality and mannerisms of the two characters. I also think including the music was a good idea as it fit your story incredibly well. Great job.

Mina-san, thanks for all the support
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But seriously, I really surprised myself here. I'll probably do another if inspiration strikes but im done for now

Do one for Hifumi and Makoto.

I'm not gonna take requests. I don't think I can make a good phanfic from a ship that I'm not really interested in, sorry.

As you wish.

I do love Hifumi tho, so we'll see.

Do whatever works for your ideas.

This was so sweet and the music was a very nice touch! I'm proud of you boy

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My goodness, this was really beautiful. I'm...really amazed at this, Mako-chan. You know how to make a good Phanfic.
It's amazing how the music ended as I finished reading the story. Did you time it to the music or was it just me?
❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️
~You can have my heart~